hey guys does this sound any good for an antagonist

there's this guy who gets so pissed with his life, he cuts off his eye and his nose, then goes around mutulating people the same way, and replacing certain parts of their body with animal parts,

yeah uh long story

"gets so pissed with his life"

no

Sounds like a shitty edgy villain.

the evil mr edgymedgy

Magician wrote:Sounds like a shitty edgy villain.

he's not trying to be edgy he's fucking insane and runs around killing people i'm not giving him an edge he should be insecure and shy.

Fuck it, I'll bite.

Why does he get pissed at his life?
Why does he feel the need to mutilate himself?
Why does he mutilate others and why does he replace those parts with animal parts?

Who are the protagonists?

I HATE MY LIFE IM GONNA KILL PEEPL is the worst motivation for antagonists ever

Remora Influence wrote:

Magician wrote:Sounds like a shitty edgy villain.

he's not trying to be edgy he's fucking insane and runs around killing people i'm not giving him an edge he should be insecure and shy.

Yeah, I kind of got that he was meant to be insane but what I meant was that he seems like the product of edginess rather than being edgy himself.

Also, insecure and shy? He's going around fucking mutilating people. How does that work?

Magician wrote:Fuck it, I'll bite.

Why does he get pissed at his life?
Why does he feel to mutilate himself?
Why does he mutilate others and why does he replace those parts with animal parts?

Who are the protagonists?

He's around 40, has a dead end job, no one likes him, debt, etc.
No one finds him attractive, neither does him, himself.
He wants others to feel his pain.

There's a fuckton and the story line is like 3-4 stories. the main for this are

Flint - Victim of mutilation, has a long lizard tail, he's blind due to having no eyes from the attack, he's basically holed himself out and put on eye-patches to hide it. He lives in the protagonist's basement. He finds a shovel, and breaks out a small window to escape, but has scratches on his chest so his shirt is ripped and bloody, and yeah.

Tiynite - A female fairy sent from a dimension in another story that'll be explained when I organize all the shit in the story and post it on tumblr. She finds Flint and basically acts as a seeing eye dog in a way. She looks like a gold medallion, so he keeps her on his neck tied to a chain.

Sounds like shitty forum RP shit.

Magician wrote:

Remora Influence wrote:

Magician wrote:Sounds like a shitty edgy villain.

he's not trying to be edgy he's fucking insane and runs around killing people i'm not giving him an edge he should be insecure and shy.

Yeah, I kind of got that he was meant to be insane but what I meant was that he seems like the product of edginess rather than being edgy himself.

Also, insecure and shy? He's going around fucking mutilating people. How does that work?

i don't know nevermind fuck that. he's mainly just. he's doing it because he thinks he's an 'artist' and it's his true talent, like a stress reliever

which is killing people

Magician wrote:Sounds like shitty forum RP shit.

I'm a shitty Roleplay forumer.

Remora Influence wrote:

Magician wrote:Fuck it, I'll bite.

Why does he get pissed at his life?
Why does he feel to mutilate himself?
Why does he mutilate others and why does he replace those parts with animal parts?

Who are the protagonists?

He's around 40, has a dead end job, no one likes him, debt, etc.
No one finds him attractive, neither does him, himself.
He wants others to feel his pain.

There's a fuckton and the story line is like 3-4 stories. the main for this are

Flint - Victim of mutilation, has a long lizard tail, he's blind due to having no eyes from the attack, he's basically holed himself out and put on eye-patches to hide it. He lives in the protagonist's basement. He finds a shovel, and breaks out a small window to escape, but has scratches on his chest so his shirt is ripped and bloody, and yeah.

Tiynite - A female fairy sent from a dimension in another story that'll be explained when I organize all the shit in the story and post it on tumblr. She finds Flint and basically acts as a seeing eye dog in a way. She looks like a gold medallion, so he keeps her on his neck tied to a chain.

ok what genre is this even??? seriously

also people don't start mutilating others just because they have a mildy shitty life, you have to give him a better motivation than that

ammy wrote:I HATE MY LIFE IM GONNA KILL PEEPL is the worst motivation for antagonists ever

most likely
im still going with it because it's all i could come up with.

Remora Influence wrote:

ammy wrote:I HATE MY LIFE IM GONNA KILL PEEPL is the worst motivation for antagonists ever

most likely
im still going with it because it's all i could come up with.

Why are you even making it?

fuzzeedice wrote:

Remora Influence wrote:

Magician wrote:Fuck it, I'll bite.

Why does he get pissed at his life?
Why does he feel to mutilate himself?
Why does he mutilate others and why does he replace those parts with animal parts?

Who are the protagonists?

He's around 40, has a dead end job, no one likes him, debt, etc.
No one finds him attractive, neither does him, himself.
He wants others to feel his pain.

There's a fuckton and the story line is like 3-4 stories. the main for this are

Flint - Victim of mutilation, has a long lizard tail, he's blind due to having no eyes from the attack, he's basically holed himself out and put on eye-patches to hide it. He lives in the protagonist's basement. He finds a shovel, and breaks out a small window to escape, but has scratches on his chest so his shirt is ripped and bloody, and yeah.

Tiynite - A female fairy sent from a dimension in another story that'll be explained when I organize all the shit in the story and post it on tumblr. She finds Flint and basically acts as a seeing eye dog in a way. She looks like a gold medallion, so he keeps her on his neck tied to a chain.

ok what genre is this even??? seriously

also people don't start mutilating others just because they have a mildy shitty life, you have to give him a better motivation than that

dude my genre is my genre there isn't even a way to explain it, i've just came to that conclusion.

and kind of being insane and having huge anger problems kind of affects your life a lot.
along with y'know having people make fun of you a lot along side that too.

Magician wrote:

Remora Influence wrote:

ammy wrote:I HATE MY LIFE IM GONNA KILL PEEPL is the worst motivation for antagonists ever

most likely
im still going with it because it's all i could come up with.

Why are you even making it?

This whole story I write in my free time when I get bored. It's not really like some deep immense pay-check or something I'd publish.
It's just a small story I write and share with 4/5 people.
it just gives me something to do when there's nothing better to do

Remora Influence wrote:

Magician wrote:

Remora Influence wrote:

ammy wrote:I HATE MY LIFE IM GONNA KILL PEEPL is the worst motivation for antagonists ever

most likely
im still going with it because it's all i could come up with.

Why are you even making it?

This whole story I write in my free time when I get bored. It's not really like some deep immense pay-check or something I'd publish.
It's just a small story I write and share with 4/5 people.
it just gives me something to do when there's nothing better to do

How long is it?

Magician wrote:

Remora Influence wrote:

Magician wrote:

Remora Influence wrote:

ammy wrote:I HATE MY LIFE IM GONNA KILL PEEPL is the worst motivation for antagonists ever

most likely
im still going with it because it's all i could come up with.

Why are you even making it?

This whole story I write in my free time when I get bored. It's not really like some deep immense pay-check or something I'd publish.
It's just a small story I write and share with 4/5 people.
it just gives me something to do when there's nothing better to do

How long is it?

Right now?
I'd take a guess at 11-12 microsoft word pages.
i use wordpad and it doesn't give you page #'s or anything so it's just a shot in the dark.

Post what you have done so far and I'll say whether it's shit or not.

Magician wrote:Post what you have done so far and I'll say whether it's shit or not.

I'll share it later, I'm procrasting on this essay.

let's come up with characters to replace that shitty one

how about a guy that made tape for a living but then the tape factories shut down so he got a rubber pad-making job but then the rubber pad factories shut down and so in an effort to revolutionize the industry he attempted to combine tape and rubber but was disfigured in an explosion and is now a man of adhesive rubber and after a while falls in love with the female protagonist -- a terrifying tale of how society and big business are the real monsters

big poppa wrote:let's come up with characters to replace that shitty one

how about a guy that made tape for a living but then the tape factories shut down so he got a rubber pad-making job but then the rubber pad factories shut down and so in an effort to revolutionize the industry he attempted to combine tape and rubber but was disfigured in an explosion and is now a man of adhesive rubber and after a while falls in love with the female protagonist -- a terrifying tale of how society and big business are the real monsters

10/10 would read.

Magician wrote:

big poppa wrote:let's come up with characters to replace that shitty one

how about a guy that made tape for a living but then the tape factories shut down so he got a rubber pad-making job but then the rubber pad factories shut down and so in an effort to revolutionize the industry he attempted to combine tape and rubber but was disfigured in an explosion and is now a man of adhesive rubber and after a while falls in love with the female protagonist -- a terrifying tale of how society and big business are the real monsters

10/10 would read.

uhhhh
ok

cliche as fuck @ OP